Monday, September 28, 2015

September 28


2 comments:

  1. I really had to think this through, John. What an amazing difference this exercise made.

    I chose a scene where Phelan’s father, Rufus, reminds his son to be true to who he is. Here is my word list for how Phelan has acted toward his new friends: Lies, Deceit, Betrayal, and Dishonest.

    “Before you take these out back I just want to remind you of one thing we learned while studying Shakespeare. Remember what Polonius said. ‘This above all: to thine own self be true.’”

    The words held meaning for me as I considered all the stomach aches and facial acne I endured over the past few weeks, as well as stilted conversation and supporting the pretense of a life that wasn’t my own.

    REVISION:

    The words held meaning for me as I considered what I did to myself over the past few weeks—ingesting junk food that caused stomach aches and facial acne, little boils of anger turned inward. Not once did I enjoy any of the stilted conversations with Keira and her friends, yet acted as if my silent untruths were better than carefully crafted lies. I betrayed myself as much as I did them in supporting a false pretense.

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  2. I'm glad you got something from this exercise and I really like your work. I'm reading over the stuff you emailed me -- too long to post here. I haven't had any internet access recently due to my move, but when I get close to a wifi spot, it's nice to see these!!

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