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I appreciated your comments today about the artist and the problem with these romanticized views of the west. I tried to use those in the poem, and invented a form, to go along with the "invented" emptiness of the landscape. it IS a weird picture and the more i looked at it, the more it bothered me. thanks!
Bierstadt — sierra nevadas — reverse tankaHeaven looks like this Skyscraper mountains, pure lightNever ending streams tall treesLight overcomes dark — sometimesHere sky vanquishesNot like the cities of homeWhere coal burns air and the poorPeople and the immigrantsRuin the view. HereIt’s empty. I say it is No one lives here, it’s all oursLook at this picture: take it.
Reverse Tanka! That's so cool!
oops sorry - i posted twice ! :-(
Way Out West, Where Eden HidesA wall of snow capped mountainskeeping the world out on one sideand the secrets in on the otherthey stand guard like the Cherubimwho blocked the entrance to Edenlooming... the Titans of the westdown below a mystic paradiseuntouched by man or by timetheir secrets have no need to hideclear and blue, the icy lake watercuddle against the towering pinesserenaded by the whispering windthe red clay soil caked with needlesand imprints of a creatures feetgive no hint of what's underneathspirits of the elders glide pastweaving in and out of the waterfallpurifying themselves once moreway out west, where Eden hidesis a magic for those who find itbut doom for who tries to take it
I love your take on this. Captures the mood of the piece definitely!
In 1868You painted California forestsWith towering trees Breathing lungsOf the landscapeRooted in majesty.As your brush Broke into sienna and forest green across your canvasWas it peaceful, orDid you notice The elk alertDid you hear the crosscut saw?Sipping tea today in this houseBuilt in 1910I am surroundedBy kidnapped victimsChopped into beamJoist, and panelRedwoods abductedFrom old growthCalifornia forest.Fixing a longtime leaky roofIn 2010The surprised worker foundRedwood walls With no lost integrity Does your painting now displayA foregroundOf well weathered stumpsFraming Your mountains.
Oh that last was brilliant and I love the kidnap victims!
You invited me to an escape up northa visit to the tranquility of pristine waters.Nature’s purification for young city-souls, an exciting date butmy prettiest shoes were ruinedby your motorcycle pedal-rest, yourugly helmet flattened my fluffy hair.The wind stole conversation andyou forgot my existence while youtwisted through mountain turns in a noxious landscape, all roadside motels were full and you stoodpowerless and wide eyed when I cried.Then you took uncharted, rutted roadsinto the forest with an enchantedwood cabin but the iron bed waslike an uncomfortable rack without a mattress and scaryghoulish bodies knocked about in the attic, while you pretended to be sound sleep, afraid to discover what it was;a raccoon rollicking above us.Bearded hunters mocked and cussedwhen we were discovered in their sacred den before dawn’s early and much too bright, bright light.In the bleary morning we discovered the magic lake with its small row boat.You huffed and puffed as youstroked me towards the enticing sideof the enchanted lake to make lovebut the terrain was mush and marshand I didn’t share your passionabout exposing my ass in thethe charming pasture, inviting bugsand mosquitoes to bite my skin.By now we were starving, and we feasted on sweaty balls of processed cheese found deep inside my backpack. Then we headedsouth, driving the gas tank with worrydown to empty. Never before had civilization felt so timely and so good. I slept on your shoulderin the cheap café. You didn’t try towake me because finally you had caught me, calm in your arms.
I love that you're doing this Judy. Wonderful poem!
when I saw that painting, I remembered that perfect lake in the middle of horrible date my boyfriend planned. we were seeking romance, in the logging areas of Northern Quebec...
Albert Bierstadt Among the Sierra Nevadadeer serenely sipunder towering terrainheavens on fire
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