Each month, write a new collection.
You’re a cartoon.You’ve sold your sex You’ve hyped the dreamSuccess Looks like you.Your bird eyebrows, pencil perfectWavy lips pout in the sunBouncy jumpsuit foregroundTantalizing allure Cosmetics cake the pain.Cartoon pretty is a need you sayFor other to see clearYou say it makes you feel good tooWhy is thatCrock full?Waves wash in plastic six pack strapsHurricanes pound the shoreOld age brings saggy wrinklesBotox will never winAs whales wash up dead.Stop touting cinderellaMake believe usCartoon deepMake believe lostTo climate changeEpicenterDisney land.
Wow, that's a powerful and even angry poem! Love it.
Awesome poem J! I love the line "Waves wash in plastic six pack straps" One of my all-time favorites! :)So, I think I almost wrote an entirely positive poem. Trying to work from a more balanced perspective, and also working on clarity. Reading Gluck's Wild Iris over an over and taking notes. Ship in mid-distance, Payzant Cat-tails on Sea-cliff, the Twiningin this harrowed out space is whereI meet the final youas the universal I. The alcovewhere each cliff dwelling navigatormust dive from its unfed nestto the surface under whichthe fish breathe the curvesof broken glass. I tooexist at arm’s length fromthis scene, where I listen to yourbrush. This final youdives: harrow. The havocof the bottle, the blue carpet thrown diceby the unseen moon, the shatterof the wind on two-spirit canvas. Stipples raisethis space we share as the universeof you. We exist at armslength, wouldthat we embracehere. We dive.
In hindsight, there is probably nothing positive about my poem. I tried to look a bit more into his life and couldn't find much. I think in the next draft I would pull his name out, so that it wasn't a filter on how the poem was read, nor could it be seen as an unintentional slighting of the artist by association by the subjects I include. I know I sometimes push more of wild sort of poetics, but I also get very concerned about representation, particularly when it comes to other artist's and thinkers.I wonder how much of his work I've seen in Disney productions that I didn't even know was his. Just musing here. Have an excellent night/day of inspiration y'all.
Yeah, I'm reading over a bunch of your work right now, and it's very cerebral in a way that your poetry isn't. Usually, your really emotional and explosive. Here you're almost reserved. Maybe that's not the right word. Anyway, I really enjoy these.
AnimatorYou're so dramaticexaggerating the riskdeepening the colorsraising the tideYou're so loudblaring the noisesbrightening the sunlengthening the timeYou're so nervychurning the oceanlayering the dramacreating the divideYou're so differentenhancing the landbroadening the experiencechanging the world
Love it when you engage in anaphora!